September 6, 2017

World Literature

College Essay

Peer Feedback

·       Visual check by me to begin class

·       Make sure two sets of eyes read every paper...each of you will receive feedback from two other people, and each of you will use these peer review sheets to provide feedback (both on the sheet itself and on the actual paper – yes, you can mark on their paper).  

·       When you hand in your 3rd draft this Friday, September 8, also hand in this draft and the peer feedback sheets.

Author: ________________________________________

Reviewer: ______________________________________

Guiding questions...

1)    Does my essay grab the reader's attention in the first paragraph? Please answer, yes or no, and explain why you feel like my opening grabs the reader's attention or perhaps is a little boring or in some way fails to grab the reader’s attention.

2)    Do I focus enough on telling my story or do I spend too much time on stories in which other people were the primary actors?  Please explain here and/or write “see paper” and clearly indicate on my paper some specific ways I might improve my focus.

3)    Do I go off on tangents or provide too much information on certain things and perhaps not enough time and space on other topics that deserve more attention?  Where specifically do I need to cut some information and where do I need to add some? Please tell me here or write “see paper” and clearly mark the paper.

4)    Do I effectively use descriptive details to bring my story to life, or do I rely too much on telling rather than showing?  Where specifically do I need to do more showing or less telling? Please tell me here and or write “see paper” and clearly annotate my paper.

5)    Overall, did I come across as a memorable person that someone might want at their school? Why or why not? If not, what could I add to help the reader see me as a real person they could connect with and trust to be a good member of their community? Please give specific suggestions, as this really matters to me.

6)    How is my grammar and sentence structure? My punctuation, spelling and word choices? Can you circle places where I might have a mistake and write a brief note or suggest a correction?  If you don't know how to fix it, at least point out places where you think I might have a problem with everything from an awkward sentence to a misplaced comma or misspelling? Thanks. Please make these marks directly on my paper.  Thanks.