* Look at one example of a less successful college essay to help you avoid similar pitfalls - walk through it and evaluate it with the rubric
* Review new rubric to replace the one on the assignment (which frankly is not specific enough to be useful)
* Respectful but helpful peer reviews
* Deepak Chopra?
Addendum to the College Essay Assignment (schedule) and revised rubric
1st typed draft is due Friday, September 1. Read rubric and self-edit . (visual check in; possible 10 completion points
- 10 points for a typed essay - of at least 400 words; do not exceed 650 words.
- 5 points if it is not typed
- 0 points if it is too short or you have nothing
2nd draft (typed) is due Wednesday, September 6. (Peer feedback) –
- 5 points or zero (for typed 400 word to 650 word essay – visual check in)
- · 50 points provide - I provide feedback, and this draft gets a grade based on rubric. I will return it to you September 15.
Final (4th ) due Friday, September 22.
- · 10 completion points for handing in a typed final draft with annotated changes based on feedback from myself and others
College
Narrative-Essay Rubric
Exemplary
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Adequate
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Inadequate
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Focus/
Central Argument
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-The essay fully
engages the reader and vividly develops the essay prompt.
-A crisp and
memorable person is revealed.
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-The essay holds the
reader’s attention and successfully develops the essay prompt.
-A distinct
personality is created.
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-The
reader may lose interest in or forget the focus of the essay.
-The
writer is not memorable.
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Evidence
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-The reader is likely
to tell another person about this student/essay.
-The writer has
effectively used the “Show, Don’t Tell” strategy.
-Descriptive details
provide voice and support the focus/inform the reader about the student. Unnecessary details are omitted
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-The
reader recognizes positive qualities the student/essay possesses.
-Writer has mostly
used the “Show, Don’t Tell” strategy.
-Descriptive details
are present but may not be consistent throughout, may be overdone or may not
always be necessary.
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-The
reader may be left wondering what distinguishes this student from others.
-The prompt may be answered but with little
depth or insight.
-Writing
lacks vivid detail and/or distracts the reader with unnecessary
tangents.
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Voice/tone
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-Tone is professional
but not stuffy. It is consistent
throughout
-Voice is natural and
appropriate for the essay and essay prompt.
-Essay flows well
with natural transitions and organization.
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-Tone
is professional and appropriate.
-The
student’s voice is apparent.
-There
are no organizational issues in the essay.
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-Tone
is routine, awkward or inappropriate.
-One
has no sense of the student’s voice.
-Organizational
strategy is unclear.
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Style/mechanics
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-Sentence
structure and diction are varied and enhance the essay to create a coherent,
cohesive and unified whole.
-Essay
avoids too much jargon and/or clichés.
-No
noticeable mechanical errors.
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-Sentence
structure and diction are accurate and avoid glaring redundancies.
-Essay
avoids clichés.
-There
no glaring errors.
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-Errors
and/or redundancies in sentence structure or diction are apparent.
-The
essay or parts of the essay appear unoriginal.
-Mechanical
errors are distracting.
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Provide Comments on the back
COMMENTS: (Provide specific
comments on the strengths and weaknesses of each of the four areas you are
assessing above: focus/central story, evidence, voice/tone, style)
Focus/central story:
Evidence:
Voice/tone
Conventions/style
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